Tuesday, February 5, 2013

Five Sentence Fiction Submission

Prompt word was delicate.  Enjoy!
 
Little Emmaline Harris cupped the delicate baby bird in her soft hands, not wanting to break its body any further. Its head lolled upon its broken neck, causing a single tear to roll down her innocent cheek. She had not known what death was before coming across the bird's still form. Had not known the terrible sadness that now filled her at the sight of the small body. As she lowered the feathered creature down into its final resting place in her mother's flower garden, Emmaline whispered a small prayer wishing the bird a second chance to truly live in its next life.
 

6 comments:

  1. That first recognition of death in a child's life is so sad, this is beautifully written Kayla!

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  2. Quite moving Kayla. I loved the subtle way you handled one of the most horrific events anyone can witness and to have it seen through the eyes of an innocent child. Emmaline is too young to actually know what the tragic of death is, yet somehow she knew inside what needed to be done. There are adults who have no idea of what dignity is after death, they would do well to take a lesson from her. This lesson will serve Emmaline well as she grows older and has to face it again when it involes someone close to her.

    [What do you know...I left 5 sentences as my comment.]

    Would love to hear your feedback on my endeavor in using this prompt. This is the 2nd time I've participated with Lillie.

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  3. Aw... I love this. And though well on the other side of childhood, I still feel exactly the same way when I find a dead bird. Love use of the prompt.

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  4. Oh that's gorgeous, so delicately written too, the gentleness and sadness the child has is so well conveyed! Well done!

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  5. This brings back a lot of memories, not only my own, but of children I've known. There's something about the realization that nothing can be done to change the situation that steals some of the innocence from a child. Very nicely written!

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  6. This is beautiful; such a delicate subject written with such care. You've captured the innocence so well. xx

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